Making Decisions--Draft One
Making Decisons--Draft One
Growing up means making my own decisions owing to the fact that it is not easy to make a good decisions. When I was a child, I was too young to discern waht is right or what is wrong. But now, I am not the simple and unaffected little girl anymore. I am old enough to be responsible for the decision that I make. Furthermore, I don't depend on other people too much, for I have become more and more independence. Therefore, we should start to make my own decisin and account for the decision.
The hardest decision that I ever made was to decide whether I should straddle the department of commercial pursuits or not. Due to the fact I study in the department of foreign language ,and I am not very interested in it. If I straddle the department of commercial pursuits, I will have to go to cram school and spend more time on studying than others. However, I get more sense of achievement on it. Therefore, I decided to straddle the department of commercial pursuits. I will study harder and never regret.
posted by 美萱 at 8:17 PM
8 Comments:
"to make a good decisions" should write " to make good decisions"
"Therefore, we should start to make my own decisin and account for the decision."--> "decisin" should write "decisions"
the word on line2 "waht" should change into "what"
",for I have become more and more independence." 為什麼要用for啊?
*Therefore, we should start to make my own decisin and account for the decision.* should change to *Therefore, we should start to make our own decisions and account for the decisions.*
"The hardest decision that I ever made was to decide whether I should straddle the department of commercial pursuits or not." "or not" can be erased.
1. I don't depend on other people too much, for I have become more and more independence.那個for當因為，一定要放句首
2.I get more sense of achievement on it.用from it比較好，謊覺得啦
1.Growing up means making my own decisions owing to the fact that it is not easy to make "a" good decisions.我覺得growing up 那一段可以分開寫，而且 make good decisions 多一個a
2.I was too young to "decide" "what" is right "and" what is wrong
3.I don't depend on other people "any longer." 感覺比較順
though you don't like English....but it's the important language in the world.
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