Wednesday, May 23, 2007

Computer-Draft One

Computer-Draft One
A computer has become more and more important in our modern life. For it make our life more easy and convenient, people are unable to leave it. We not only do the homework with it but enjoy a lot of entertainments, such as play games, listen to music, etc. And for those who are busy, they give the service to shop on the internet for them. We also make friends by using chatting room or e-mail. Besides, we get information from all over the world through the computer net work. It attests that people know what happens in the world without leaving their houses. A computer does influence our life.

Personally, I have a liking for a computer. And it surely plays an important role in our life. But it does make a bad effect for people. It is just like drop abuse. If you are addicted to it, you will waste too much time playing on it. With that, your eyesight will become worse and worse. In addition, you may spend a large amount of money paying a power bill.

5 Comments:

Blogger Fanny said...

" internet " can change into Internet

3:56 AM  
Blogger 娜娜 said...

*For it make our life more easy and convenient,* can change to *For it makes our life easier and more convenient,*

7:02 AM  
Blogger Dora said...

"For it make our life more easy and convenient, people are unable to leave it."--> write "For it makes our life more convenient and easier, people are unable to leave it." is better.

4:40 AM  
Blogger Jenny said...

第二段應該寫出妳喜歡電腦的"原因",而不事寫出使用電腦的缺點...

5:20 AM  
Blogger Phoebe Lee said...

一個句子的開頭最好不要用"And, But"這些字。

6:32 AM  

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