Translation--Draft One
Computers
Computers play an important role in our everyday life because they not only help students hand in their homework quickly but also help people send the information in time. You must fall in love with computers as long as you turn on them. However, be sure to remain yourself; don't spend too much time sitting in front of the computer. Most parents do not like their children to depend on computers, especially it waste too much time discussing on the bulletin board.
TV Grograms
It is essential to choose TV programs. Though the television is a capital channel to provide information and entertainments, they may be some deficiencies. Some of them which be filled with violence and lust make a disadvantage influence to teenagers. And it do harm to our eyesight. Therefore, we should choose some programs that good for our mind. Finally, the most important thing is that do not become a video fan.
posted by 美萱 at 8:23 PM
8 Comments:
*we should choose some programs that good for our mind* should change to *good for our mind and body.*
"it waste" should write "it wastes".
"we should choose some programs that good for our mind." should change into "we should choose some programs that good for our minds and bodies."
The title "TV Grograms" should change into "TV Programs".
"Some of them which be filled "
maybe you could change into
"Some of them which filled"
I can't find other mistakes in your article.
I think you make a good job.
You did a good job;it just has a little question.
I think "daily life" is better thatn "everyday life"
though television and computer are harmful for our eysight it give us a good way to relax.
You did a very good job.
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