My bedroom--Draft One
My bedroom
My bedroom is a place where I can do many things.
It is big, but I share the room with my two brothers.
There are two closets next to the door on the right.
And our beds are on the left corner near the door.
The mirror which is as big as my bed is just in front of the beds.
My older brother's bookcase is nearby the closets.
And a computer on the desk is next to the bookcase.
Our desks are next to it.
Although the bedroom is a little small for us, I like it very much.
posted by 美萱 at 6:30 AM
5 Comments:
*My bedroomMy bedroom is a place*
you should change to *My bedroom is a place *.
You are a girl, but you share your
room with two boys. Poor of you.
But I think you will be a very good
older sister.
You should change "The mirror which is as big as my bed is just in front of the beds." to "The mirror, which is as big as my bed, is just in front of the beds.". I think it's better.
"And a computer on the desk is next to the bookcase"
maybe you should change into
"And the computer which is on the desk is next to the bookcase"
I share the room with my brother,too.
But it's ok.You enjoy your room,right?
I share the bedroom with my younger sister. But I still love the room,so does my sister.
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