An Emgarrassing Ecperience --draft 1
An Embarrassing Experience
There have been more and more embarrassing experiences since I was only a little girl .Some of them are very embarrassed that I never forget from then on .
When I was an elemantary school student , we don't have to wear uniform to school .One day I wore a short skirt to school , and the weather was wonderful .Because the athletic meeting was coming , the music teacher let us practice running . And I was sitting on the review stand to see my classmates who joined the contest ,
and they were practicing . But soon, I felt bored and got , and I wanted to go back to the classroom .I jumped down down the review stand .Suddenly, something happened at that moment .
A big hole was on my skirt , and everyone saw what I wore inside the skirt .It was so embarrassing .
Since then on , I was afraid of wearing a skirt .If it isn't necessary , I will never wear it .
posted by 美萱 at 6:25 AM
6 Comments:
"I felt bored and got "
got what?
"I jumped down down the review stand ."
you should reduce a "down" from this sentence.
"There have been more and more embarrassing experiences since I was only a little girl."
"only" can change into "just"
"When I was an elemantary school student, we don't have to wear uniform to school."
Your "elemantary" should change to "elementary".
"When I was an elemantary school student, we don't have to wear uniform to school."
Your "elemantary" should change to "elementary".
*I felt bored and got*
What is got ?
*I jumped down down the review stand .*
Why do you use two down ?
In you article should change "elemantary" to "elementary".
"I felt bored and got....."what did you got?
"I jumped down.."you have two down.
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