Tips for staying healthy--Draft One
Tips for staying healthy--Draft One
There are some tips you can do for staying healthy.
First of all, we should have healthy diets because it can help us increase our resistances.
In addition, exercising every day is also necessary. We can temper our physical strength by exercising regularly. Finally, it is important to be in a good humor every day and don't be to anxious.
posted by 美萱 at 5:10 PM
6 Comments:
"don't be to anxious"
chang into "don't be too anxious"
It's a little short.
*Tips for staying healthyThere are some tips you can do for staying healthy.* should change to
*Tips for staying healthy . There are some tips you can do for staying healthy.*
I think you wrote this article in a hurry. So, it is short.
The title should be "Tips for Staying Healthy--draft 1"
"Tips for staying healthyThere are some tips you can do for staying healthy."
"Tips for staying healthy." is not necessary.
It's very short.
You can write more.
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